The article,"Downside Of Facebook" composed by Mary Schneider discusses mainly about the disadvantages of facebook in the point of view of the author.As a whole,I believe the author has not well organised her points as it is mostly scrambled up. Her points are not directly stated but are more probing based.For instance, "Like,Why not?Why would having a spliff(joint) stop you from getting on Facebook or sending your friends a text message,or vice versa?",this sentence does not clarify her point.
Besides that, the evidence provided by the author to substantiate her points is not well supported.She has not provided information on the source of her evidence.This can be seen in the following sentences,"According to a recent report,less and less young people in the UK are turning to drugs,partly because they are too busy on Facebook or sending text messages" and "It could be ,if they are on Blackberry all the time ,that that's the way they socialise and communicate:you don't want to be doing that and having a spliff at the same time.Or so an expert said recently".
Moreover,certain part of the article does not clearly convey the author's stand on the issue.The inaccurate usage of words makes it even more complicated.The part is as follows,"Of coure,after all that faffing around you might get online only to forget what it was that you wanted to sayon facebook.Then your bladder might take charge ,so all you get to write is,'Going for a pee,be back in a sec'."
Hence,I believe that the author should get her facts straight and find the best method to convey her message before she publish an article out of it.
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