Thursday, October 18, 2012
critique 1.0
It is still beauty before brains
A very interesting and brainstorming quote that attract both the male and the female to the article which is written by Chok Suat Ling from News Straits Times. It is related to our thinking and perception toward the judgment of a female.
The article written is very well organised that it make the flow of the idea well and the reader will see the picture portrayed by the writter clearly. She provide the reader with enough evidence and example that are specific, accurate, relevant and convincing.
It really show the urgent need of the mind changing or revolution of all the man-kind toward the judgement of the female. In the article, by comparing how actually a women should be judged and how they are being judged, it aware the reader about their ways of judgement toward the women.
Last but not least, it successfully shows a picture of the ways nowadays the female judge themselves and their action to achieve beauty is stupid and laughable things to the reader. It achieve the goal to make the women who read this article to realize their mistake.
In conclusion, this article is a good article that it educate the women and also the men change their view of beauty of women.
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Dear David...
ReplyDeleteAs u mentioned above the article is well organised with the idea flowing well. In my opinion, the article can be divided into three components. The first part is the author's acknowledgment of famous Malaysian women who has thrived without the prejudice of men towards their appearance. The second component portrays examples of how women are discriminated by their looks and thirdly, she adds her own opinion into the article addressing the issue. There are links between each components of her article but she fails to connect one component with the other. She does not link each of the components together making her article incoherent.
ya, i agree with u.
ReplyDeleteActually i did this critique before i went for the class discussion so i didn't see the flow of the article clearly and i thought that it is good enough. Anyway, ya, it is actually not very well organised although we can categorized the point into three parts. However it seems that the author actually putting in too much example and less of her opinion and loads of example. In the first glance we will find out the flow is quite well but we go through it for another time, we found out that actually her points and opinion and even example is scrambled everywhere that we can't actually link the example together and it make it less convincing. It suppose to come with a paragraph with a point, following with elaboration and lastly example. although this may seem dull, it actually make the whole article look more organised and it will be easier for the reader to understand what is the writer talking about.
and please, don't add a dear before me. Bro will do but not dear.. haha.
ReplyDeleteGood, discussion enables us to scrutinize each point in a deeper sight.
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