critique 2.0

   Although the article entitled ‘ It is still beauty before brains’ by Chok Suat Ling makes sense, but the first  paragraph doesn’t fit with the last paragraph. The first paragraph talks about the 50th National Women Day celebration, whereas the last paragraph talks whether beauty is a blessing or curse which does not seems to be compatible.

         Furthermore, I think the author should see this problem not just from one side but from others' point of view as well.  Rather than making her own assumption that everyone considers beauty first, she should realise the existence of certain people who give more importance for brain than beauty.

        Besides that, I definitely would say that the author fails to define certain hard words. One such example would be 'corpus collasum'. I am very sure only people of medical or scientific background will understand this term, as it is not an English word but a medical term.  I think the article would be more interesting to read if we know what we are reading. So, it would have been best if the author was to give the definition of the term, 'corpus collasum'.

          In a nutshell, this article needs to be polished a lot more but definitely is able to create an awareness among the readers about discrimination towards women by judging them based on their physical appearance.

critique 1.0

  The article entitled ‘ It is still beauty before brains’ by Chok Suat Ling is very clear,  that is the words used are common and easily understood. The choice of words used in the article makes the readers to have a clear understanding about the article. But ambiguity arises  among readers when scientific term is used . For example, the usage of the word ‘corpus collasum’ certainly will create a confusion in readers’ minds.

          Moreover, this article certainly needs further elaboration. The examples given are not illustrated in detail. Furthermore , personally I think that the examples given are not reliable. It would have been more reliable if the author was to give the details of the source from where she gathered those information. For instance, she must have stated the name of the women magazine and the date the magazine was published. By this we can conclude that this article is not very accurate in providing the examples.

          The article is also not precise. Throughout the article, the settings such as time and place are not stated.  For example, the author stated that there was once only 10% of women undergraduates, but didn’t state the year and place. 

        In short, this article lacks many aspects but definitely induces the readers' mind to think of the issue that is being discussed.